Still, as I was writing this I came up with my title and liked it a bit better…but either would work well in my opinion.Overall I thought the emails were fine but saw these as the biggest changes: I would shorten the emails. I see the first email as something short and simple to get her to look at my profile.I’m very much looking forward to the summer and nice weather. Enjoy your weekend Again, I just shorten things a lot here.I assume she’ll appreciate the teacher comment based on friends I have who are teachers.I’m not going to change the general tone or point of the emails but I am trying to ensure he remains anonymous by changing some of the specifics.
While I do live in the ‘burbs, I am absolutely in love with Seattle.As with the earlier emails, I felt this email had too much of him describing himself and describing what he saw in her.Not bad conversations, just happening too early and maybe better to be had in person (depends on who you’re talking to I guess).I cover my approach writing first emails with online dating in my post First Contact Email Examples.In that article I also give some examples of how I would write some first emails based on several random dating profiles.In this article, I will review some more first dating emails based on advice I gave to a reader.He provided me with three emails he wrote and I reworked them to be closer to what I would have written.With that in mind, I’m not saying his emails are bad.I just believe based on my own experience they can be improved upon because sometimes we make our first emails out to be more than they should be.I change it from brunch to coffee because coffee is easier to do than brunch for most people (and I can’t help but wonder if every guy would ask her out to brunch because it’s in her profile).I’ve added what could be considered a weird email title because I’ve found odd email titles encourage opening the email. Here’s his final email example: Hang Gliding Hi, how do you do?